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not the best........ honest opionions

You taught me how to smile, how to live life once again,

I really found my true love, never the same again.

You taught me how to laugh, the sound it was so sweet,

The love we ooze a sure sign, something no-one could defeat.

Our plans we made, our life we built, as solid as could be,

Everything was so perfect, when you were here with me.

My butterflies in my stomach every time we met,

Not one minute of our time, then, do I ever have regret.

We were getting married, hopefully a baby on the way,

So sure was I, then, that your love was here to stay.

Everything was so perfect, I couldn’t believe my luck,

So true to Julie fashion, I was sure to come unstuck.

Then

My smile faded, I lost the will to live once more,

My true love does not want me, an I’ve been shown the door.

My laughter a distant memory, will only haunt him in his sleep,

The love we oozed all gone now, no longer will it seep.

Our happy life the cherished memories we shared,

Etched in my mind, never knowing if you really cared.

The butterflies have turned to knives now, cutting me to shreds,

The certainty of knowing, you will cut the final threads.

Because the future you held with such tender hands,

Your letting, slipping, like the hour glass sands.

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  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago
    Favourite answer

    This is very very good, though the "then" posted in the middle is a little........ "je ne se pa"

    the poem is really good though

    question: Is the poem called "not the best" or is that just your insecurity about the poem itself, if it is you have nothing to worry about because the poem really stands well, well done star from me

  • 1 decade ago

    I like it very much, it seems to come from the heart and is full of emotions. Very touching and poignant.

  • 1 decade ago

    really good poem!you should enter a poem contest-my friend did and hers was put into a book.

  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago

    wow, this poem is really good!

    whoever wrote this should enter a poetry contest! i'm not even kidding.

  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago

    I like it :) not the best I've seen but good non-the-less

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