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Maniacal laughter with his face

In the shotgun shells

Always within close reach

Sit up and check her text

10 bucks if you speak

Across the street

They pull up to see

To see the lights go out

Pupils die late and adjust

Pump action cross both shoulders

We strecth in with the beat

As the wind begins to howl

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  • 2 weeks ago

    Your poem is good.

  • Anonymous
    2 months ago

    chosen people = the ones that have the correct religion. orthodoxy is the only true faith with one cup and one spoon and no one gets sick. roman catholics tried one cup one spoon ritual and got sick with bubonic plague; if heresy enters orthodox monastery, then its inhabitants will get sick also. covid = another heresy; that's why disposable cups were introduced in heretical gatherings. churches who had disposable cups, masks, disposable spoons, dipped spoon into alcohol, or closed for covid = no grace of the Holy Spirit in them = they woik for satin. death to de antichrist! oh...snap... here he iz flyin' thru ma neck of de woodz; hide ur kidz, hide ur wife; antichrist is flyin' thru town; take ur glocks out and shoot dat son of a bytch down; he's an s-o-b 'cuz his mother is a 12th generation prostitute to jews and hindus; ew...he's gay 'cuz she a lesbian who pretends to be a virgin; well...

    Source(s): project blue beam will show five figures (christian god, buddhist god, hindu god, muslim god, and jewish god) merging in2 1 (de antichrist); so, hide now (within a 7-15 people group; 10-12 according to saint seraphim of sarov; 10-15 according to saint gabriel urgebadze)... no documents as they r from satin (burn 'em); no electronics so that u won't be tracked (even old broken unplugged 1970 tv set will show de antichristo using tesla's ether); forgive me 4 dis spiel.
  • 4 months ago

    This makes very little sense without like ten readings, no offense.  It was, indeed, intense. You did a good job with that.   Don't kill her. There are plenty of fish in the sea.  

  • 4 months ago

    This is good ****

  • 5 months ago

    Learn to breathe in love and compassion, then exhale your anger into air and watch it float away...

  • 5 months ago

    I don't appreciate hate speech being passed off as poetry.

  • 5 months ago

    I don't like it. It's heartless.

  • Tina
    Lv 7
    5 months ago

    I really doesn't make much sense. In what way is it a poem?

  • Anonymous
    5 months ago

    Confusing...

    I had to read it twice to understand.

    My thought's interfered with your reality first and I misunderstood the real message.

    And it's still confusing.....

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