please can you rate my poem?

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what do you think of this......

The shim-sham ram skin bust late beneath the Quaver
Harrowed like a flickered lounge of sapping fawn
And dusky wails of Frazzles tempted over glum
whilst monster munch dipped a crunchy toe
and tipped a foot shaped hat
To every pickled onion that danced upon his master's tongue
In glutton's bounty then they turned more rolled over
Lest Transformasnack should hunt them down
with creaking wheels of lesser chassis bent
as if not to slow but represent the disregard heaped
As heavy as as many Walkersrustlingg in Frampton's glove?
Perhaps
Yes by all accounts perhaps
So rest your head my child
Tangy Toms they come tonight

The Queen · Accepted Answer

I'd say you should call it 'The Pickled onion of the Monster Munch's soul'

kostenbauber · Answer

This poem is incredibly good for a newbie, there is defiantly some marvelous imagery in it, regardless of if it varieties of lacks direction, its slightly puzzling, it starts off with you happy you have chanced on somebody, yet they are no longer incredibly yours? and then they pass away, that's an excellent storyline, yet you will need for occasion a element in the poem while they pass away. It would not incredibly rhyme in places, which i do no longer blame you for, rhyming poems are very very perplexing, so perhaps you will desire to easily attempt non rhyming poems initially. in case you like the assumption of rhyming nonetheless, attempt basically making it lyrical while spoken, counting the syllables according to line is a robust thank you to try this. Poetry would be relaxing and extremely relaxing, i think of you will desire to proceed, you additionally could make some money! yet you will desire to purchase a e book on writing poetry to truly get the suited consequences, i prefer to propose "the ode much less travelled: unlocking the poet interior of" through Stephen Fry, he's astounding and and extremely marvelous.

Rosalinda · Answer

Hi. You wrote this poem from your heart    I give you a 10 and for the Title "Tangy Toms" . T.C

♞Edward♘ · Answer

Give me a minute, Im going for my dictionary

Ivan Enriquez · Answer

Pretty good I would rate it an 8 :D

Christopher · Answer

Sucks, I'm sorry it's possibly the worst I've herd.

? · Answer

You are kidding, right? Please say this is a joke.

If so, it's hilarious! I give it a 10!

If not-- wow, too bad. It's nonsensical rubbish.

please can you rate my poem?

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